我今天细看了两遍较难的6分范本,点评这篇如下:
It is unfortunate that today's educators place so much emphasis on finding out what students want to include in the curriculum and then giving it to them. It is the educators' duty to determine the curriculum and the students' duty to study what is presented to them.
题目的意思是,当今教育部门过于看重学生在课程设置中的决定用途,正确的做法是教育部门决定课程,学生的任务就是认真学习。
The statement above conceals1 intesting connotations far above curriculum development. Issues of classroom control and development of scholarly talents are at stake, not simply a debate over which books are acceptable or over revisionist histories.
开题表明课程设置是次要的,要紧的是适合的课堂秩序与培养学生的学术才能。这是一个典型的另起炉灶型的作文,提出issue题目中并不包括的看法。
The statement itself is a bit misleading in that in my experience, student control over curriculum hardly existed. Each year, there were certain course offerings made available, and students were to choose from those offerings, of course bearing in mind requirements for graduation set forth2 by the administration. On a classroom level, the immediate3, initial material may have been somewhat directed by the students, but this was a part of the process allowed by the teacher/professor insgroupsto gain the interest and attention of the students.
However, too much of any one thing becomes problematic;
letting students set the curriculum, as with letting students choose and design their own major in college, serves ultimately to dilute4 the quality of the educational experience unless a single advisor5 can devote significant amounts of time to the inpidual student. This amount of time, or even the expense to the student of this inpidual attention, seem to indicate that resources would be better allocated6 elsewhere.
后半截虽长,但意思只有一个,让学生决定课程内容会导致教育水平的降低。
Of course, any school in which the students decide what goes is bound to have problems controlling students. once the educators, be they administrators7 or teachers, are under the control of students, even a democratic situation would be like holding royalty8 acountable to the mob. Presently, students hear for hours that they should not forget to use a condom in the heat of the moment, and educators think the message gets through, while half the kids can't even remember to bring a pencil to class. Students go to school not to simply learn the Pythagorean theorem, but to learn direction and receive guidance. This cannot occur when students are in charge, and standards, already hard to find in America's contemporary public schools, will become unenforceable. If students dictate9 and administrators do, students will never learn academic responsibility, and if they can't be held accountable for homework, what other responsibilities will they avoid when they get older?
这一段相对比较简洁,通过举例等方法,说明学生缺少自主决定课程设置的能力,让他们决定课程设置将使他们得不到direction and guidance.
But in another sense, teachers and students do exist in a partnership10 of sorts. Teachers are there to satisfy the needs of the student, and the student, while perhaps not being the most experienced/ knowledgeable11 person on what his/her needs actually are , at least should be afforded some say. In addition, we must remember what the purpose of education is, and that there are different levels of education.
这里才进入了作者筹备论述的主要内容,即学生和老师应当是伙伴关系,而不该是哪个强迫哪个干什么。不过,后面加了个in addition,又强调了一下教育目的和不同层次教育的差别。扯进去的东西太多了!
In high school, the focus is not so much on learning actual material. The focus is on developing study habits, and on social interaction. The best secondary schools promote an environment in which inpidual creativity and pacing can be developed,swheresstudents are taught to think on their own, and learn to debate and argue in a scholarly way, through writing and other formal methods of discourse12.sgroupscollaboration and interpersonal skills are developed and honed. The actual details of what is studied and tested is of less importance. Whether a student reads Maya Angelou, or Yeats, or Euripides essentially13 is beside the point as long as a student's mind is cultivated, not just their ability to record and recite.